Yukinoshita's Correction Method

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Volume 2 Club Activities: Chapter 23: Unspeakable

"You're still so energetic today," Yukinoshita Yukino covered her mouth and yawned, stretching lazily, "It seems I underestimated your energy. After reading all that, you're still so energetic."

The slender body is stretched and taut, making the school uniform form a beautiful curve.

The way Yukinoshita Yukino stretches really looks like a cat that has had enough sun.

"It seems like you've been studying quite hard," Dong Yunshan even felt the urge to put a cat-ear headband on her. "You didn't finish it all in one night, did you?"

"Yeah, I haven't stayed up late for a long time, and I haven't read this kind of work before." Yukinoshita Yukino rubbed her soft face, "The process was very painful, it seems I can't like it."

"Hmm?" Perhaps because she had just woken up, Yukinoshita Yukino's reaction was a little slower than usual, but she still grasped the key point. "From what you said, you haven't finished reading it yet?"

"I'd like to ask you why you want to finish reading it."

"This is a commission from the Servant Club." Yukinoshita Yukino's eyes grew stern. "Of course we have to take it seriously."

"It seems you really haven't read light novels." Dong Yunshan pulled over a chair and sat down. "So-called light novels are novels that can be read easily. If I can't finish it, it's his problem, not mine."

"You're irresponsible for stopping reading just because you found a problem." Yukinoshita Yukino stood up from her chair, looking down at her with a condescending and unfriendly gaze. "The reputation of the Servant Club will deteriorate because of your irresponsible attitude."

"On the contrary, the person who will affect the reputation of the Servant Society is you, who forced yourself to finish reading it." Azuma Yunshan stood up, and immediately went from being looked down upon to looking down upon. "It's better to teach a man to fish than to give him fish. That's the principle you proposed. And by trying to find every flaw in Zaimokuza's work, you're depriving him of the right to discover those flaws."

"My purpose is not an excuse for you to be lazy." Yukinoshita Yukino took a step forward to increase the deterrent, her cold eyes like Snape seeing Harry Potter use his invisible strike.

"Laziness is the ladder of human progress." Azuma Yunshan also took a step forward and raised his hand to shake Yukinoshita Yukino's head. "And now, the winner is clear."

"Gu..." Yukinoshita Yukino stood on tiptoe. "Human success isn't determined by external features. Even if we really have to judge by size, we should use relative evaluation and judge based on overall balance..."

Just as the two of them stared at each other, a vibrant voice rang out.

"Hello~" Yuigahama Yui opened the door and walked in with great spirits, "Touyun, Yukino-chan——I, I didn't see anything!"

Yukinoshita Yukino is standing on tiptoe to let Azuma Yunshan touch her head!

So... so cute!

Take another look.

When Yuigahama Yui, who had subconsciously looked away, turned her gaze back, Azuma Yunshan and Yukinoshita Yukino had already parted ways.

"Remember to knock when you come in." Yukinoshita Yukino returned to her seat and sat down. "And I should have said that your misunderstanding makes me very unhappy."

"I was going to ask you what you thought," Azuma Yunshan looked up and down at Yuigahama Yui's cheerful expression, "but seeing how lively you are, you probably haven't read many pages."

"I didn't mean to disturb you, why are you suddenly against me?" Yuigahama Yui said aggrievedly, "You two actually have a very good relationship, right?"

"It doesn't matter if you haven't seen it." Yukinoshita Yukino didn't want Yuigahama Yui to have any more strange misunderstandings. "It's enough that I've seen it alone."

"I haven't read many pages either." Dong Yunshan just said it casually, but when it was combined with Yukinoshita Yukino's words, it seemed a bit offensive, so he made up for it by saying, "This is not your problem."

"You're comforting me together again..." Yuigahama Yui was confused by their change in attitude. After thinking about it, she came to the conclusion, "So your relationship is really good."

Azuma Yunshan & Yukinoshita Yukino: "..."

Bang bang bang.

"I'm here as promised!" Zaimokuza Yoshiteru greeted him, striding in with great speed. He plopped down on a chair and majestically crossed his arms over his chest. His slightly bloated figure seemed to become even more bloated due to his inflated self-confidence. "Then let me hear what you all think."

Speaking of thoughts... Dong Yunshan tried to recall the content of the work.

Simply put, the story is set in a city and describes how a mysterious organization and people with super powers who have memories of their past lives appear and disappear in the dark. Then, an ordinary young protagonist discovers the power hidden in his body and defeats his enemies one after another.

"I'm sorry," Yukinoshita Yukino showed a rare expression of being embarrassed, "I'm not familiar with this kind of work."

"That's fine." Zaimokuza Yoshiteru had anticipated this. "I'm just looking for some common sense opinions. Feel free to speak up."

Azuma Yunshan looked at Zaimokuza Yoshiki with sympathy in his eyes.

If Yukinoshita Yukino could speak freely...

"Okay." Yukinoshita Yukino took a deep breath. "It's very boring. It's even painful to read. This work is boring beyond imagination."

Zaimokuza Yoshiki was hit so hard that he almost fell off his chair.

Dong Yunshan sighed.

That's what happens.

"Can you tell me what's boring so I can use it as a reference?" Zaimokuza Yoshiki no longer had the energy to continue performing.

"First of all, your grammar is a mess." Yukinoshita Yukino flipped through the manuscript. "Why do you keep using inversions? Don't you understand how to use prepositions? Didn't you learn that in elementary school?"

"Well, that way of writing is more fluent..." Zaimokuza Yoshiki struggled weakly, "It's easier for readers to feel familiar..."

"The premise of intimacy is correctness. Sentences that don't make sense will only cause confusion." Yukinoshita Yukino flipped through two pages. "Secondly, the phonetic notation is also wrong. How could [Phantom Red Blade Flash] be marked as [Bloody Nightmare Slasher]? Where did [Nightmare] come from?"

"This, this is a unique style. The phonetic notation of recent superpower fighting works is very unique..."

"The premise is that someone can understand it." Yukinoshita Yukino pointed out sharply, "Do you really want people to understand this work? By the way, speaking of the work, the plot development is too easy to predict and there is no fun at all. And why does the heroine have to take off her clothes here? Logically, there is no need..."

"Wait, there's this kind of plot?" Dong Yunshan flipped through his manuscript. "Why didn't you tell me about this exciting thing earlier?"

Volume 2 Club Activities: Chapter 24: Reversing the Heavenly Gang

All eyes were on East Spruce.

"Why are you all looking at me?" Dong Yunshan said innocently, "Look critically. How can you criticize me if you don't look at me?"

"Also, the narrative sentences are too long and contain too many uncommon characters." Yukinoshita Yukino rolled her eyes at Azuma Yunshan. "Also, don't show people an unfinished story. Before showing off your literary talent, first provide some common sense..."

Every word hit Zaimokuza Yoshiki like an iceberg, making him scream and tremble.

"Xukino..." Yuigahama Yui was afraid that Zaimokuza Yoshiteru would pass away, so she interrupted weakly.

"I haven't finished yet." Yukinoshita Yukino put down the manuscript, "But if you want to say something, then it's your turn."

"Eh? I...I should say something too?" Yuigahama Yui hurriedly picked up the manuscript and flipped through it, "This...um...that..."

Okay, Dong Yunshan was discovered.

Yuigahama Yui didn't just read a few pages, she didn't read it at all.

"Well, I... I think..." Yuigahama Yui felt guilty when Zaimokuza Yoshiki looked at her pleadingly, and she squeezed out a sentence with difficulty, "You know a lot of difficult words!"

"Puff!" Zaimokuza Yoshiki spat out a mouthful of blood and slid off the chair to the ground.

He had burned out and turned into snow-white ash.

"Huh?" Yuigahama Yui was puzzled. "Why? I've been trying so hard to praise him."

"Light novels are easy-to-read novels. They're written in the language readers are used to, making them easy to understand and suitable for young boys and girls." Azuma Yunshan answered Yuigahama Yui's question, "Using difficult-to-understand words is the biggest negative for this type of work."

"That's it. I knew you could understand me..." Zaimokuza Yoshiki struggled to get up. "Brother Touno, if it were you, the world I described, everything in that world, you would definitely be able to understand!"

"Although I only read part of it," Dong Yunshan gave him a look that said, "Trust me, it's not wrong," "but after finding some other ways, I finally figured it out."

"Good brother!" Zaimokuza Yoshiteru somersaulted, but didn't stand up straight, as if he had used a water splash. "Finally, someone understands my hard work!"

"I saw it all and kept it in mind." Dong Yunshan pounded his chest and took out a notebook from his schoolbag. "I even wrote it down on paper."

Yuigahama Yui: “Huh?”

"The school section is from Full Metal Panic, the villain organization is based on Overlord, the monster designs are from Sword Art Online, the abilities are from A Certain Magical Index, the relationship between the hero and heroine is similar to My Little Sister's Life, the family situation is similar to Literary Girl, and the supporting male character is from Mystery Appraisal of Jewel Merchant Richard..." Dong Yunshan put down his notebook. "I think I should have missed everything."

“Ahhhhhhhhhh!!!” Zaimokuza Yoshiki covered his head and rolled wildly on the ground.

Water splashes, water splashes, water splashes, water splashes, water splashes~

Yuigahama Yui was so scared that she hid behind Yukinoshita Yukino, "It seems that the damage you caused is greater than the two of us combined."

"Don't you say you don't read light novels?" Yukinoshita Yukino had just asked the question when she answered it herself, "Do you have a friend?"

"He works in a fan club and is an expert in this area, so I consulted him," Dong Yunshan recalled, stroking his chin. "He also asked me to give the author some heartfelt advice."

"Professional advice? It sounds impressive." Yuigahama Yui was afraid that Zaimokuza Yoshiki would die here, so she hurriedly asked, "What is it?"

Dong Yunshan: "Find a class to attend."

"Ah——————!" Zaimokuza Yoshiki made a terrifying sound and stopped splashing water.

"It's over, it's over!" Yuigahama Yui was shocked, "It seems like he's dead!"

"You put so much thought into it," Yukinoshita Yukino noticed the increasingly bright smile on Azuma Yunshan's face, "just to see him in such a miserable state?"

Dong Yunshan shook his head: "Of course not."

Yukinoshita Yukino was very surprised: "Isn't it?"

"Yeah." Dong Yunshan nodded. "It's just a phone call. It didn't take much thought."

"Anyway..." Yukinoshita Yukino held her forehead helplessly, "This commission was completed smoothly."

"Huh?" Yuigahama Yui was incredulous. "Is this considered completed?"

"Having survived such a blow, he should be able to face online criticism head-on." Yukinoshita Yukino tapped the manuscript lightly with her fingertips. "This is truly teaching a man to fish."

"So you finished reading it overnight to complete your all-around attack on him?" Dong Yunshan recalled their initial discussion. "Not to help him discover all his mistakes, but to sharpen his spirit to the point where he could face criticism head-on?"

"My ability to see through the essence has improved." Yukinoshita Yukino yawned, covering her slightly open mouth. "Although I haven't seen it all yet, at least I've made some progress."

"Wait," Dong Yunshan's heart moved, and the recent quarrels and arguments rushed through his mind, "Then those words you said are also..."

"If I deny your form, you'll start to think about its inner meaning. When you try hard to refute me, that's when your ideas are most resolute. Over time, before you act, you'll think about the meaning and be prepared to refute me." Yukinoshita Yukino smiled, a rare smile. "It seems this correction method is very effective for you. Although your reaction is still a little slow, at least you've reacted."

"You..." Dong Yunshan opened his mouth, "I..."

"Refute me, use your rebuttal to express your agreement with me." Yukinoshita Yukino put her hands behind her back, leaned forward slightly in an unguarded posture, raised her cute face to the point of offending, and narrowed her big eyes into happy crescents. "I've said before that human success is not determined by external characteristics - and now, the winner is clear."

The messy black hair fell down, casting a vague shadow on Dong Yunshan's face.

Why did the atmosphere suddenly become serious?

Yuigahama Yui looked around in confusion, a little afraid to speak.

"Ha..." Dong Yunshan raised his hands to cover his face and couldn't help laughing out loud, "Hahahahahaha!"

All along, Azuma Yunshan has been looking down on Yukinoshita Yukino with the superior attitude of an adult.

I viewed her persistence as childish stubbornness, her sharp tongue as childish rebellion, and her goals as childish fantasies...

But he forgot what he said.

“I see the green mountains as charming, and the green mountains should see me as such.”

Volume 2 Club Activities: Chapter 25 Children's Words

"So, everything Yukino said was to correct Shinonome?" Yuigahama Yui muttered softly, "That doesn't make sense, does it?"

"Of course it's wrong for you." Azuma Yunshan, who had laughed enough, let out a long sigh, "But in my eyes, Yukinoshita has privileges."

Yuigahama Yui was confused, "Privilege?"

Is it because Yukinoshita Yukino is cute?

Is it a pleasure to be scolded by a beautiful girl?

Yuigahama Yui silently moved a little further away from Azuma Yunshan.

"Are you serious about taking a half step back?" Dong Yunshan was about to sing, "It's such a small action, but it hurts so much."

"That... I can understand..." Yuigahama Yui hurriedly waved her hands, "Isn't it often said that people are free."

"You say you understand, but your body is honestly pulling away. You've got it all wrong. Not only Yukinoshita, but you too." Azuma Yunshan pointed at Zaimokuza Yoshiki lying dead on the ground. "Zaimokuza is the same."

"Me?" Yuigahama Yui pointed at herself blankly, "Me too?"

She didn't feel that she had any privileges in front of Dong Yunshan.

"Children's words are innocent." Yukinoshita Yukino snorted coldly, "He has been in society for a long time and treats us students in school as children. As long as it doesn't involve issues of principle, mature adults won't argue with children."

Children have limited abilities and can only show off their eloquence.

Adults have various methods and don't care about verbal disputes.

No matter how sharp-tongued Yukinoshita Yukino is, she still has to wear cat ears and meow like a cat.

This is what is called adult leeway.

"So..." Yuigahama Yui recalled Azumanga's reaction before, "Azumanga really gives people a sense of old-fashionedness."