After dreaming of getting rich, I dressed up as a collapsed idol

Really, not positive at all.

This weekend, the negative-energy student Lu went to a music store to attend the last free violin lesson.

After the class, Teacher Li fell silent.

He looked at the boy's back as he walked out the door, then turned back to look at the remaining students.

For the first time, I realized the meaning of the saying that the gap between people is greater than that between people and pigs.

With such incredible talent, it would have been great if I had learned piano earlier.

Teacher Li expressed this sentiment again.

……

"Afeng, Afeng, help me take a look."

After this weekend, it will be the last week of March.

Early Monday morning, Lu Qingfeng had just entered the classroom when Liu Xin came over.

"what."

He yawned.

Liu Xin looked around like a thief, then took out an exercise book from the sleeve of his school uniform.

"How about the beginning of the novel I wrote?"

"What subject matter?"

Lu Qingfeng became interested.

"Fantasy, haha, it's my first time writing, so it's not good, please don't laugh at me."

Liu Xin wiped her nose with her hand and spoke modestly, but her expression was confident.

Lu Qingfeng opened his masterpiece.

"Fighting Power, third stage."

As soon as these words came out, Lu Qingfeng's expression became very interesting. Could it be...

Well, he was overthinking it.

Liu Xin is not a time traveler like him, although they are both losers, but the protagonist of his novel is not called Xiao Yan, and there is no ring that can produce an old man.

There were three chapters in total at the beginning, and he finished reading them quickly.

"How about it?"

Liu Xin looked at him expectantly.

Lu Qingfeng was thinking about how to tell him tactfully that this was a piece of shit.

"What are you two doing? Standing here like door gods."

Hou Xiaobing and Lu Hui walked into the classroom at this time.

Lu Qingfeng waved the homework book in his hand.

"Zhuangzhuang wrote the beginning of a novel. Let me help you take a look."

Liu Xin wanted to stop it, but it was too late.

Their eyes suddenly lit up and they squeezed over.

"let me see."

Lu Qingfeng gave the notebook to Hou Xiaobing, who opened it and put it on the table to read together.

At this point, Liu Xin no longer hides it.

As a result, after reading only one chapter, the two couldn't continue reading. Hou Xiaobing didn't say anything, patted his best friend on the shoulder, and returned to his seat.

Lu Hui is more direct.

"What the hell is this? Apart from the opening part where the protagonist is introduced as a loser, how come so many people suddenly appear in the rest of the story?"

Liu Xin couldn't hold it anymore.

"You know what? This is called creating conflict, switching perspectives to describe the protagonist's difficult situation from a different perspective."

"Right, Afeng."

He looked at Lu Qingfeng, seeking recognition.

Lu Qingfeng said.

"Zhuangzhuang, you just started writing, and I think it's pretty good."

Upon hearing this, Liu Xin immediately looked at Lu Hui with pride.

But then the tone changed.

“There are still some minor flaws.”

"You said this is the first version, and I'm showing it to you so you can give me some suggestions and I can revise it."

Liu Xin is very convinced of Lu Qingfeng's writing ability.

"it is good."

Lu Qingfeng no longer showed any mercy and complained harshly.

"Aside from the 300 words in the opening paragraph, is there any point in the number of words in the rest of the first chapter? There's no need to rush into the worldview. You could summarize the protagonist's situation in a few sentences first, then slowly describe it later. It's best not to stray from the protagonist's perspective."

"The current difficulties have brought about the emergence of the Golden Finger. How to use the Golden Finger to solve the difficulties is the most important thing."

"Characters can appear one by one, so that readers can sort out who is who. If you introduce so many characters at the beginning, who can remember them all?"

"The latter part is also strange. There is so much description of the scenery. It is unnecessary. One or two sentences will suffice. Leave appropriate blank space to give the reader room for imagination."

"The pacing is also weird. The gold finger doesn't appear until the end of the second chapter. If the previous part doesn't build up readers' expectations, not many people would want to read this far."

"Let's not talk about the writing style. Online novels don't care about writing style. As long as the story is told clearly, it's fine."