crush the rich

After talking with the teacher, Luo Gu thought for a long time and revised the script again.This time he changed it to a vision that suddenly appeared in the society one day, some people suddenly began to experience strange injuries, and this situation is like a virus, which will be transmitted through some network activities, the most direct is Forward and reply.

In the beginning, this kind of injury did not attract too many people's attention, because injuries are so common in life, many people don't even realize that they are injured in time, and it takes a while to realize the pain. There are wounds on the body, and recall when they may have been cut.

Because of this, this incident did not attract public attention at the beginning. Although some people who saw the news at the same time realized that several people they knew were injured at about the same time, it felt like a coincidence, but it was just a coincidence That's it, I didn't think too deeply about it.

Until the appearance of the No.1 deceased.

The No.1 victim died in a secret room. He was an Internet celebrity and was working in front of the computer when he was killed.After a complicated investigation, the police came to an extremely incredible conclusion.

The victim had multiple wounds, deep and shallow, but none fatal and had been treated.The real fatal wound was on the chest, suspected of being stabbed by a sharp object, but there was no murder weapon in the room, and there was no sign of the body being moved. Even the apartment was a real secret room—the victim lived alone, seldom went out, and the door was usually closed Closed, and the doors and windows are equipped with anti-theft locks, it is almost impossible for outsiders to break in without destroying these anti-theft facilities.Except for the victim, no relatives or friends have the keys to his house.

Through the investigation of the scene, the victim was stabbed in the chest, but the clothes at the wound were not damaged.At first, the police thought the murderer had changed his clothes.However, after a detailed investigation of the scene, it was found that there were many stains on the clothes, and there was a takeaway food box next to the stains that was consistent with the stains, but had been eaten almost, and even started to stink.

That is to say, the victim ate a takeaway when he was still alive, and he should have been wearing the clothes when he was eating the takeaway, and accidentally splashed the takeaway soup on his clothes.

Based on further investigation of this clue and other details in the house, the police came to a very incredible conclusion.

The fatal wounds on the victim's body were likely to have appeared on him suddenly.

Of course, it is impossible for the police to approve this investigation result, which is completely inconsistent with the physical rules of reality and full of surreal meanings, but at this time, another murder occurred.

Several murders happened one after another, and all the victims were Internet celebrities or people with certain influence on the Internet.The death methods of these people were basically wounded to the vitals by sharp weapons, and the clothes they wore were not damaged in any way.During the investigation, the police officer heard a rumor that many Internet celebrities have been injured inexplicably recently, and they were all inadvertently cut.

Out of intuition, and thinking of the inexplicable wounds on the deceased, the police investigators felt that this incident might be related to the murder, so they began to investigate the injured.

During the investigation, the police officers discovered that many of the victims were related to a news event that is currently causing heated discussions on the Internet.And all the injured people were either bribed or guided by rumors, spreading rumors and false personal attacks on the victims and their families in the news incident, so that they indirectly led to the death of the parties, even after their death. After that, they never stopped slandering him and attacking his family.

After reading Luo Gu's script, the teacher felt that there are still many lines and plots in this script that seem immature, but it is still a story with a novel setting and an exciting plot.After thinking about it, she found Luo Gu, but this time she very solemnly proposed a lot of detailed revision suggestions to him.

The teacher himself is a professional screenwriter, very experienced in this field, and put forward some very valuable opinions. When Luo Gu listened, he only felt that he had gained a lot, so he almost didn't think about anything other than nodding his head.

"Like the plot here, the handling is actually too flat. In the face of life-threatening, although some people will die for the sake of reputation or profit, but some people will be afraid of it, so you can let different people have different opinions. Response, in order to help the police solve the case."

"The murder incident itself inherited your previous version of the story, but it has also been perfected in details, and it was handled very well, but I think you can learn from the real case in the materials brought by Ms. Yin. It doesn't have to be complete. The victim's company is behind the push, and it is entirely possible to write that the murderer also bought the media with money in order to get rid of the crime..."

In Luo Gu’s story, the victim who was killed by rumors was squeezed and framed by the company. In order to resist the company, he wanted to expose the company’s evil deeds. Instead, the company took the lead in mobilizing public opinion to slander and pour dirty water... Everyone knows that he substituted Peter Pan here, but Luo Gu changed the company into a financial company, and there was no content about personal injury, because to him, the scar was still bleeding, even if it was The veiled mention would still make him sick, humiliated and painful.

He didn't want anyone to think about it in the slightest. It's fine to say that he's deceiving himself, and he can stick his neck out and curse back when others attack him, but that has already consumed most of the courage he got from Miss Yin.He didn't have more courage to take the initiative to act out such a story.

The teacher also understood this, and tacitly acquiesced in this setting. He only told him the details of some related industries and asked him to further improve the event, but he did not suggest that he write about occupations he was more familiar with.

In the story, after the victim was framed, a series of chain reactions of erroneous circumstances were triggered, leading some people to take the rumors seriously, thinking that the victim had an ulterior relationship with his girlfriend, and murdered the victim because of this.

But it's actually a trap.

However, in order to conceal the facts and mitigate the crime, the company and the murderer had to do their best to confuse black and white, drive public opinion, and smear the victim until the conclusion was reached.

The real case pointed out by the teacher is completely different from this case, but one thing is the same, that is, after the murderer accidentally killed the innocent victim, in order to get rid of the crime, he began to try his best to buy the media, drive public opinion, spread rumors and smear the deceased, in order to get rid of the crime. to try to change the nature of the case.

Luo Gu also read the whole story of this case. He was easy to empathize with, so he was naturally very angry when he read it.So after the teacher put forward this opinion, he just froze for a moment, and quickly understood what she meant.

The murderer is a manslaughter, of course he is guilty, but in order to escape the guilt, he slanders the victim because of this, it is like hitting someone with a car because he is afraid of paying the medical bills, so he deliberately turns around and kills the person, especially vicious and disgusting.

Luo Gu also remembered this point.

The teacher put forward a lot of revision suggestions in a piecemeal manner. In addition to the perfection of details and logic, she also taught Luo Gu what methods to use to make the characters appear more vivid and lively, and to write the whole story closer to reality. , making it easier to resonate.

After finishing all these details, the teacher said: "Next is the last and most important point."

Luo Gu raised his head, waiting for the teacher's follow-up with a serious expression.

The teacher said: "You need a Hero (hero/male protagonist) in your story."

When Yin Lian came to inspect everyday, she would be surrounded by children for a long time every time.The girls will take the initiative to surround her and talk about their recent life and achievements. The boys will be a little shy because of their gender, but they will also help to deliver things before and after.

The teachers took the initiative to help send the group of children away, which gave Yin Lian the opportunity to ask about the progress.

The teacher took out all the stories provided by the children and showed them to Yin Lian.These stories are not all, but those that the teacher screened out after reading them and felt that they had potential.

Yin Lian read two of them, and unexpectedly found that the stories were wonderful.Although she occasionally pays attention to the children's homework and knows that some children's essays are well written, compared with this time, it is just an ordinary composition.

In contrast, this homework can be said to be quite a standard short script, and it doesn't even look like it was written by a child of this age - if you see Yin Lian in Xiaguo, you won't be surprised, but in Huaxia It's really unbelievable.

The teacher said: "Their writing skills are not bad. As junior high school students, in fact, many children's basic writing skills are relatively mature. They may make some progress in high school, but unless they are engaged in literary creation, most of them are not good at writing. People's writing ability is often at its peak in high school, and there is little further improvement in adulthood, but more degeneration."

Yin Lian thought about it and agreed with this statement.After all, learning is like sailing against the current, if you don't advance, you will retreat.And the study intensity of many people in junior and senior high schools is also the peak in their lives.

However, the experience and logical expression shown here are also more mature than Yin Lian's expectations.

Regarding this point, the teacher also said: "They have personally experienced similar incidents, and they have both experience and insights about this kind of thing. What children often lack in writing is not ability, but experience. But just public opinion When it comes to cyberbullying, our experience may not be as good as these kids."

Then she added: "Of course, I have given suggestions on the character's emotional transformation and lines. However, I only gave suggestions. In the end, I helped analyze the character of the characters. The specific creation is still done by themselves. of."

Yin Lian smiled and said, "Thank you, you did a great job."

The teacher also laughed and said, "It's just a matter of duty."

Yin Lian read the short script, and when she came to Luo Gu's article, she was taken aback for a moment, and asked, "This 14-year-old genius girl forensic doctor... Teacher, why didn't you ask him to change it?"