There is nothing wrong with the training method of the Justice Messenger

Li Nian reported his progress to An Yi. Hearing An Yi nodding continuously, he knew that his friend was extremely efficient when he was serious about his work.

Following Kasumigaoka, he could only reluctantly skip the topic of lunch and report his own progress, which was also the amount of text that made An Yi's eyes light up.

One of the benefits of working together on a script is that two screenwriters are working on it at the same time. An Yi knows that if the momentum continues, the script will be completed quickly.

But as mentioned before, a collaborative script requires constant confirmation of both parties' content to avoid deviating from a unified standard and causing contradictory bugs. Afterwards, Li Nian and Kasumigaoka confirmed each other's specific writing results.

At just one glance, Li Nian felt something was wrong.

Li Nian's frown was seen by Kasumigaoka.

That clearly meant that he didn't seem to agree with the results he had produced.

Kasumigaoka didn't say anything, but lowered her head and also looked at the galgame script written by Li Nian. At a glance, she found that this script was different from the articles Li Nian had written in the past.

I immediately realized that this person had made some changes to his specialty of novel writing in order to write a game script...something I had not done.

Li Nian carefully read through Kasumigaoka's first attempt at writing a game script on the laptop he brought with him, and suddenly started typing something based on the content given.

An Yi also brought a computer over and was reading the two scripts to show her own results, but she also showed some confusion because she found the differences between the scripts written by Li Nian and Kasumigaoka... Of course, the writing styles and ideas of these two people are different, but the differences between the two that An Yi discovered at this time were not in those aspects.

Everyone received the script files uploaded by Li Nian and Kasumigaoka, and were reading them silently. They noticed that the expressions of these three people were not right, but they themselves found it quite interesting and thought it was a very good script. They didn't know why the two script writers and the producers all had expressions as if they felt there was something wrong.

After Li Nian, everyone quickly finished reading the opening parts written by the two scriptwriters in the club.

The first person to speak in the silence was Kasumigaoka.

"Is there something wrong with your stuff, Li Nian, or is there something wrong with my stuff?"

"An Yi?" Li Nian threw this question to the producer.

"There's something wrong with Kasumigaoka-senpai's script." Amaki answered immediately.

"why?"

"From a casual glance, it's a great performance by Kasumi Shiko, and quite interesting, but... when compared with Anian's work, it's clear that you, Kasumigaoka-senpai, haven't started to create in the form of a game script."

It must be very infuriating for Kasumigaoka to have his hard work denied.

Her expression did become very scary in an instant. Although she remained calm, there was obvious anger brewing in her pupils.

But what was said was not a denial, but a request for further explanation.

"Where exactly is it?"

Being stared at by that deep and cold gaze, An Yi really didn't have the courage to continue speaking, and she shrilled and passed the blame to another person: "A-A-Nian, you say it!"

"Obviously, Senior Kasumigaoka is still writing the game script in the form of a novel." Li Nian said bluntly: "Your dialogue is too short, not colloquial enough, too much psychological description and too little action description, the characters don't feel alive and moving, so the plot advancement doesn't have the atmosphere of a text adventure game, dubbing, CG, BGM are not taken into consideration, and there is no room for these elements to be inserted between the lines, but these are part of the game, they are necessary elements, and even part of the story. You need to consider them and then use them to write the script."

After hearing what Li Nian said, Kato and others went to read the script of Kasumigaoka again and felt that it seemed to be true. It was a text that was like a novel but not like a game script.

"…You can say it so straightforwardly because you have considered those things and have changed the way you write, right?"

"Ah."

"Of course, Senior Kasumigaoka wrote it very well." An Yi quickly comforted Kasumigaoka, who was obviously unhappy, on behalf of the straight man Li Nian: "There are only a few problems with the form! It was only because I compared it with the script written by An Nian that I was able to find something wrong. The specific problem is just as An Nian said, but it's not a big problem, just a little change will do."

"Yes, it's mainly a matter of expression. It's a blessing that I found it at the beginning. It would be more troublesome to change it after writing the entire line of text... Then, here is my feeling after trying to change the script you wrote in my own way. You can compare them."

After Li Nian quickly finished reading it, he started typing and writing. At this time, Li Nian pushed out the computer and showed it to Kasumigaoka. It was he who tried to modify the script paragraph of Kasumigaoka.

The revised text became much more concise, but the dialogue became longer and was also changed, making it more like what the characters would say.

There are blank spaces in many places, and the notes are expressed through CG.

After the revision, it has undoubtedly become better as a galgame script, showing that this is the correct form of script writing.

Kasumigaoka thought so and acknowledged her own problem, but for a moment she found it difficult to find a feeling that could move her heart.

Of course, she didn't start writing the galgame script without any research. She consulted a lot of information before she started writing, but problems still occurred.

Li Nian found the problem, explained it clearly, and gave an example of a solution.

"…My reason tells me that I should change to your way of writing, but I myself have not yet felt the necessity and fun of this way of writing."

"...What should I do if you say that?" Li Nian suddenly felt a headache. This was saying that she was missing the "crackling" feeling of an incoming call, but how could Li Nian find that thing for her?

"That's easy." An Yi immediately gave a suggestion: "Wouldn't it be nice to watch a few gal games? I guess you said before that you would go back and find a few games to play, but you didn't play them at all, right? That won't work! You're not attracted to gal games because you haven't experienced the fun of them!"

He certainly would not miss such a good opportunity to preach, and took out his PSP: "Here, take it, senior sister, it contains various masterpieces including "Steins;Gate" and "Clannad". I will bring you the PC disk later."

"Don't bother." Li Nian also gave his own Baipiao method: "You can also find other people's game completion videos uploaded on the Internet, and just watch them without prejudice, just like reading a book. Interesting gals are really worth reading, just like good books. By the way, the classic "Tale of Immortal" series is also very interesting. But if you want to get into it, it's better to start with the new work "False Mask", the style of painting is not so old... Although the game type is SLG? But don't worry about such trivial matters, anyway, these are my references."

Kasumigaoka thought about it, took a deep breath, and her expression became calm. She also felt that she was lucky to be discovered for the problem at the beginning. If she finished writing a line and was rejected, she would probably want to kill someone on the spot... After she figured it out, she simply took Aki's psp and said.

"Then I'll take the content back and revise it... after I've played the game and found the feel for it."

Kasumigaoka did what he thought and left immediately.

An Yi is still frightened.

"Luckily, Ah Nian was here to discover the problem..."

It was none of his business. Sawamura was just watching the fun and was amazed: "It's not a good sign that something went wrong right at the beginning of writing the script."

"Even someone as talented as Kasumigaoka-senpai can make mistakes." Kato felt very strange.

"Because it's the first attempt at scriptwriting, everyone will have problems." Wu Geng looked at Li Nian and said, "It's actually more strange that someone can have no problems on their first attempt."

"I don't know what I might do wrong. It would be better if I could find out early and correct it early... You too, Amai, don't let your guard down. I can find out the problem with Kasumigaoka, but I'm afraid you're the only one who can find my problem."

Li Nian remained calm, having anticipated that the two novelists who were starting to write scripts for the first time would not make smooth progress, and that problems would inevitably arise in the early stages. He reminded An Yi again that as a producer he also had an obligation to supervise.

"Ah Nian, you are still reassuring. To be honest, I can't imagine a situation where you would make a mistake... What do you think that would be?"

"…It is precisely because I don't know what the situation will be if I make a mistake that I need you to find it."

"...I will pay attention."

Chapter 439 With His Help

Although Li Nian asked An Yi to pay attention to his problems and monitor the content of the script, at least at this stage, An Yi did not feel that there was anything wrong with the beginning of the script written by Li Nian.

Li Nian’s task was to complete the content of the common line.

The very beginning part is naturally about the mysterious male protagonist, Kinoshita Shin, who suddenly comes from another place and transfers to the school.

Although An Yi, who had read the entire script outline, already knew how the story would develop, he still deliberately ignored the spoilers when reading the script and tried to read the text as a player who knew nothing.

The previous works of Li Nian that he had read were all articles with grand settings and lofty intentions. The stories unfolded from the perspective of the devil, and the style was very high. Writing this kind of campus life plot at this time can be said to reflect a difference from Li Nian's previous style, and the tone is light and cheerful.

After creating suspense by concealing the protagonist's background, the story does not over-emphasize the protagonist's mission and purpose, as if he is just a transfer student. A sunny and youthful feeling is created between the lines.

Although at this moment one can't help but think of the various tragedies that followed, one suddenly realizes that this is the calm before the storm...

But undoubtedly, from the perspective of a first-time reader, it will be a very comfortable experience.

The current content has only progressed to the scene where the male protagonist enters school, meets the female protagonist, and takes the initiative to talk to her. The female protagonist, Ito Shiko, is portrayed in all kinds of cuteness, and her sharp tongue is also reflected vividly, and the interaction makes people laugh.

There's just an insert cg mark next to it. Without the cg, An Yi couldn't help but always think of it as two people in reality. She imagined that she was trying to strike up a conversation like Anian, but ended up being scolded by the cold Kasumigaoka-senpai... It always felt like this was not the way these two people get along at all, it was weird.

Oh, no, if you really put yourself in the shoes of people in real life, then you are the one with a mental illness.

Overall, it is a very catchy beginning. An Yi feels that if it were a game, this plot alone would be enough to catch the player's attention and motivate them to continue playing.

Although the style has changed, and the writing is no longer about lofty content such as war and peace, but focuses on college life and daily details, it does not change Mr. Muzi's writing style, which is simple but vivid.

Kasumigaoka hasn't found a way to write game scripts yet, so he needs to stop and make some changes, but An Yi is extremely satisfied with the results Li Nian has given so far, and feels that he can continue to write according to this feeling.

Li Nian confirmed with An Yi that everything was correct and went back to continue writing.

That night, Kanda came to see him. Unlike some alien who would just kick the door open and never ask the owner's opinion, he would knock on the door properly.

"It's me, Li Nian. Are you free? Can I talk to you about something?"

"Oh, you're free, come in."

After getting permission, Kanda pushed the door open and saw Li Nian busy typing away like crazy.

The fingers were so fast that they formed a shadow, and the dense sound of typing on the keyboard like raindrops echoed in the room. In short, it didn't seem like he had any free time at all.

Kanda was stunned.

"Uh, aren't you busy? Then I'll come back later?"

"No, you want to talk to me about something, right? I see you've been here before, so it's okay to talk in this state. Is it about the production of your game?"

"That's true, but I have a lot of questions I want to ask. How about we find a time when you have some free time?"

"I won't have much time like that. If you say so, we can talk about it now."

As Li Nian said this, he didn't look like he was going to stop typing. He just turned his head away from the screen, but his hands were still typing quickly on the keyboard, which looked weird.

Wouldn't there be any mistakes in blind typing like this? Kota, who followed Li Nian's instructions and walked into the room, sat down next to him. He first looked past Li Nian out of curiosity and took a look at what he had written. Wow, it was a smooth article with no mistakes. He was blind typing without looking at the screen, and he could actually choose the right word that popped up in the input method. Did he memorize the candidate list?

Kanda looked strange, but still asked

"Is it really not going to disturb your thoughts while you are typing?"

"No, I think faster than I code."

“……”Is this something humans can do?

Kanda tried hard not to care about this little thing and went straight to the point with Li Nian.

He did come to Li Nian to talk about things related to the production of his game.

"I've been researching the side-scrolling ACT games you mentioned before. There are mature production engines and tutorials. The more I look at them, the more I feel like I can make them. I asked Ryunosuke about it, and he thought it was feasible. He encouraged me to give it a try and was willing to help. I decided to start researching and making this kind of game."

"Oh, then, what about my suggestion that you try to make a commercial game that can be sold, and plan to invest in it, as well as provide support with the plot?" Li Nian knew that Kanda came to discuss this with him.

Kanda also looked slightly serious.

"I discussed that with Ryunosuke as well."

"Well, what's the conclusion?"

"Ryunosuke told me, "With your level of skill, do you deserve the help of that gorilla? If it weren't for your close relationship, who would help a newcomer like you? And you really have the nerve to accept it, right? Just make the game honestly first, and don't think too much about it."

"Wow, that Akasaka guy is still as outspoken as ever."

"I think that's the case, so I'll stop thinking about it for now and just focus on making games."

"Does that mean you don't intend to accept my help?"

"It means that now is not the right time." Kanda said seriously: "Ryunosuke said that this time he will fully cooperate with me and work with me to make a fun game first. Once the game has a prototype and the potential to become a good game, then we will ask you to invest and work hard on it... If the actual game is a bad one, then I won't bother your wallet."

"…Ryunosuke is willing to cooperate with you fully? Without any reward?"

"...After thinking about it carefully, I should prepare some compensation for asking such a powerful person for help. I decided to buy him a few more tomatoes that he likes to eat later...He said he wanted to work with me to make a game framework. And not bothering you to use your wallet is one thing, but other aspects of help are needed, such as the establishment of action models, battle style, and art style...But before that, he wants me to figure out the design concept of the horizontal action game I want to make, just like the previous game plan, I have to determine what I want to make first. If I can't even make a framework, there's no need to waste time on it."

"That's right. Ryunosuke is a pragmatic person. You should listen carefully to his opinions."

"I had a deep understanding of this when I was making my own Shinkansen transfer game... So this time I came here to ask Li Nian if you have any opinions on this horizontal action game I'm going to make, because I feel like you're the only one in Sakurasou who has something in common with me in this regard."

Li Nian fell into deep thought, freeing one hand to pick up the tea beside her and drink it—of course, the remaining hand was still typing rapidly, as if it had its own thoughts and life...

Kanda's eyes twitched when he saw this scene. He wondered if this person's right hand was actually a parasitic beast from alien space, and the so-called articles were all written by this parasitic beast?

Li Nian has thought it through: "As a player, when I play a game, first of all, no matter who I am or where I am, I just know that I am going to start killing people... Even if the character I control is just a stick figure, and the background buildings are just a pair of blocks, and the game is a horizontal level-passing action game of the size of a flash game, as long as I can kill people happily, I will think it is a good game."

"Oh! I know that feeling! I loved this kind of thing when I played online games as a kid!"

"I don't know much about game production, such as gameplay, plot, system, and art style. If you break it down, it may involve all aspects, but my core thing is still playability... At least this is definitely the case for horizontal action games. If you ask me what advice I can give you, it is that I hope you can focus on the sense of impact, make it fun to play, and have a good feel. It must be difficult and challenging, and it must also have the mechanisms I mentioned before, such as dodging, jumping, and counterattack... Oh, and there must also be some fun and useful skills."

Men always have common topics to talk about games. After that, Li Nian just typed while talking to Kanda, who was in high spirits, about various game-related things. They didn't specifically talk about the horizontal action game that Kanda was going to make. They talked about everything until Kanda suddenly shouted, "I roughly know what kind of game I want to make. I'll go write a plan now!", and ran back to his room as if he had a burst of inspiration.

Did I really help him?

However, Li Nian just said hi when talking about his favorite games, and then he talked about this and that without making any systematic suggestions. I wonder if he can really provide any reference for Kanda's game production.

But no matter what, the feeling that Kanda is determined to make a good new game has been conveyed.

In fact, in Li Nian's humble opinion, with the help of a programmer as good as Ryunosuke, it is not difficult for Kanda to make a game if he really wants to. He even thinks that not being able to write a program is not a reason to stop Kanda from making a game. As long as Kanda wants to do it and keeps doing it, not only himself, but everyone in Sakurasou will naturally help him in all aspects. The production of horizontal action games is also relatively simple, with mature production engines and processes. Li Nian really thinks that under such conditions, he can make a good game, so he wants to give him a push.

The original intention of proposing to invest was actually to stimulate Ryunosuke Akasaka, to let this capable coder take the attitude of facing work and work seriously on the game with Kanda... Now it seems that even without my own stimulation, Ryunosuke is serious.

Akasaka Ryunosuke looks delicate and effeminate, but he is actually a decisive action man. It is not surprising that he hates redundant behavior. He is more efficient than anyone else. Kanda is definitely immature, but Ryunosuke is not. He will support others from the perspective of actually realizing the project. His opinions are pertinent, accurate, and meaningful, and he does practical things.

If such people are willing to help, they will be a great help.

Although I thought that such a realistic person would not do anything without benefits...but it seems that Li Nian is overthinking, and Akasaka Ryunosuke obviously has a young side.

One of the characteristics of young people is that when they are in a good mood, they will not think about unnecessary things such as merits and demerits, and they don't mind being wasted on labor. The people around Li Nian are all of this type... and he himself is no exception.

But this kind of thing really doesn't matter.